我写的英语短文,请纠错,看有没有不地道或语法错误,请讲明理由谢谢Love her more than you love yourselfAt the age of one ,you were born ,she held you with her arm, you thanked her by weeping the eyes out.When you were five, she

我写的英语短文,请纠错,看有没有不地道或语法错误,请讲明理由谢谢Love her more than you love yourselfAt the age of one ,you were born ,she held you with her arm, you thanked her by weeping the eyes out.When you were five, she
我写的英语短文,请纠错,看有没有不地道或语法错误,请讲明理由谢谢
Love her more than you love yourself
At the age of one ,you were born ,she held you with her arm, you thanked her by weeping the eyes out.
When you were five, she bought you some books; you thanked her by tearing up the books.
In your fifteen birthday party, she dressed you up to it ,.you thanked her by telling she had no taste.
At the age of thirty, she wanted to help you with your work.. you thanked her by saying “it is none of your business”
………
You are each of us ,she is our mother!
After you read all above ,do you feel sorry to your mother, do you think you are not a good son or a nice daughter?
Mother give us so much, however,what actually do we do for our mom?
Maybe you could hardly say a word.
We always do little for our mother, but mother does much for us…
Everyone should cherish each single moment with our mother.
Love her more than you love yourself. Life is meaningless without her…

我写的英语短文,请纠错,看有没有不地道或语法错误,请讲明理由谢谢Love her more than you love yourselfAt the age of one ,you were born ,she held you with her arm, you thanked her by weeping the eyes out.When you were five, she
1.题目直接用love her than love yourself就好··这样才是对称的；
2.第一行中的arm应该用arms;
3.第四行里的in your fifteen birthday party应该改为at your fifteen's birthday party;
4.第四行by telling she had no taste应该是by telling her that she had no taste;(tell后面不能直接跟省略that的从句啊）
5.第九行的you are each of us不是很顺,我想改为"you" are the anyone in us会好一点；
6.第十二行actually放在第二个do后面会好一点；
7.第十五行的each single moment改为every moment好像会好点；
8.第十六行如题than you love yourself改为than love yourself比较好··
大概就这些了···拿不准的我就没说了··

有一个小错误..all the above..加上一个the才对..
其他句子真的写的好好~~很感人~

arm - arms
weeping the eyes out - crying your eyes out
some books - books
in your fifteen birthday party - at your fifteenth birthday party
to it - for it
telling she - telling her...

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arm - arms
weeping the eyes out - crying your eyes out
some books - books
in your fifteen birthday party - at your fifteenth birthday party
to it - for it
telling she - telling her that she
all above - all the things mentioned above
feel sorry to - feel sorry for
mother - mothers
our mom - our moms
actually do we do - do we actually do
our mother - our mothers
mother does - mothers do
much - so much
our mother - their mothers

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没有

1.After you read all above ,这里的时态应该为After you've read all above吧。
2。Mother give us so much, however,what actually do we do for our mom？
Maybe you could hardly say a word.
第一句中give加s,应该是笔...

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1.After you read all above ,这里的时态应该为After you've read all above吧。
2。Mother give us so much, however,what actually do we do for our mom？
Maybe you could hardly say a word.
第一句中give加s,应该是笔误吧。另外上下两句的人称有点混乱，前者说母亲给了我们太多，我们又为自己的妈妈做过些什么呢，后一句回答说“你可能无言以对”。这里you改成many of us可能更好一些。
写得很好，意见仅供参考

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说句不好听的,错误百出.还有些地方用法不贴切到位.貌似chinese english.如果需要完全修改或改动的话找我要QQ
分给不给我都无所谓

我水平一般哈，看了一下，这个的中文我是见过的。
语法应该没有问题了，只是感觉有些字眼不够地道。比如Everyone should cherish each single moment with our mother前面是EVERYONE,后面却用OUR，感觉很矛盾。用HIS/HER始终有偏向性，不如把OUR去掉。还有那个EACH MOMENT始终觉得用EVERY顺耳一点。。。。
浅...

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我水平一般哈，看了一下，这个的中文我是见过的。
语法应该没有问题了，只是感觉有些字眼不够地道。比如Everyone should cherish each single moment with our mother前面是EVERYONE,后面却用OUR，感觉很矛盾。用HIS/HER始终有偏向性，不如把OUR去掉。还有那个EACH MOMENT始终觉得用EVERY顺耳一点。。。。
浅薄之见而已，可以找个专家再给你评论评论

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do you have the chinese version, i really don't understand what you are writing about