谁帮我看看我这篇英语小作文?见笑了.The school talent show was a great success.Vera was the most creative performer.She played the guitar upside down.The prize for the loudest performer was won by the Math Teathers.There was also a priz

谁帮我看看我这篇英语小作文?见笑了.The school talent show was a great success.Vera was the most creative performer.She played the guitar upside down.The prize for the loudest performer was won by the Math Teathers.There was also a priz
谁帮我看看我这篇英语小作文?见笑了.
The school talent show was a great success.Vera was the most creative performer.She played the guitar upside down.The prize for the loudest performer was won by the Math Teathers.There was also a prize for the worst performer.Unluckily,it went to Dennis.He wanted to juggle.But he couldn't juggle at all.So he did a bad job
帮我说说这篇文章有何不足之处好改正
首先我想说我的第一句是书上的原话
并且She played the guitar upside down也是书上的原话意思是：她倒立着弹吉他

谁帮我看看我这篇英语小作文?见笑了.The school talent show was a great success.Vera was the most creative performer.She played the guitar upside down.The prize for the loudest performer was won by the Math Teathers.There was also a priz
She played the guitar upside down.——咱知道LZ是想说“她玩吉他玩得像翻过来一样溜”..但是upside down在英文里只有倒过来和一团糟的意思..这里建议改改..太Chinenglish了...可以说她是个brilliant guitar player或者skilful也可以..=.=..

翻译：学校天分展示是巨大成功。维拉是最创造性的执行者。她弹了吉他颠倒。最大声的执行者的奖由算术Teathers.There赢取也是最坏的执行者的一个奖。不幸地，它去Dennis.He想玩杂耍。但是他不可能玩杂耍。因此他做了一个坏工作
自己看看认为哪里不好~~~...

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翻译：学校天分展示是巨大成功。维拉是最创造性的执行者。她弹了吉他颠倒。最大声的执行者的奖由算术Teathers.There赢取也是最坏的执行者的一个奖。不幸地，它去Dennis.He想玩杂耍。但是他不可能玩杂耍。因此他做了一个坏工作
自己看看认为哪里不好~~~

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写的不错，但有些小缺点,
第一句话最好改成:
It was a great success of the school talent show.
倒数第二＼三句连起来：
He wanted to juggle, but in fact, he coudn't juggle at all!

sxwa304320用的是翻译机器，不准确
翻译：学校的才艺表演举行的十分成功。维拉是最具有创造性的表演者。她倒立着弹吉他，数学老师得奖是因为她的表演声音很大.这是赢取的最坏的表演者的一个奖。不幸地，丹尼斯“赢”得了.他想玩杂耍。但是他不会玩杂耍。因此他得了一个坏奖项。
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写的不错，和我们英语书上一篇范文有...

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sxwa304320用的是翻译机器，不准确
翻译：学校的才艺表演举行的十分成功。维拉是最具有创造性的表演者。她倒立着弹吉他，数学老师得奖是因为她的表演声音很大.这是赢取的最坏的表演者的一个奖。不幸地，丹尼斯“赢”得了.他想玩杂耍。但是他不会玩杂耍。因此他得了一个坏奖项。
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写的不错，和我们英语书上一篇范文有些类似，水平很高~\(^o^)/

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挺好的。