英语短文,请帮忙改下其中的错误!Why the college students’employment is difficult In my opinion,the difficulty of college students’employment is caused by the following four aspects:Firstly,the college students themselves:They are lack

英语短文,请帮忙改下其中的错误!Why the college students’employment is difficult In my opinion,the difficulty of college students’employment is caused by the following four aspects:Firstly,the college students themselves:They are lack
英语短文,请帮忙改下其中的错误!
Why the college students’employment is difficult
In my opinion,the difficulty of college students’employment is caused by the following four aspects:
Firstly,the college students themselves:They are lack of experience and unwilling to go to the undeveloped areas and their concept of employment is very old.
Secondly,the college system:A lot of colleges enroll more students year by year while the jobs are limited,causing college students flooding.Causes and training programming can not keep up with the changes of the social needs,causing on the one hand,it is very difficult to find the suitable jobs for college students,on the other hand,it is also very hard for companies to recruit suitable professional students.The education of the college focuses on theory rather than the actual operation ability.
Thirdly,the company employment system:some companies’employment principle is not very appropriate.For example,some companies raise their employment criteria blindly,while others reduce training expense through recruiting experienced workers.
Finally,global economic situation:The global financial crisis causing many companies reducing the number of recruitment of new staff,and even some Fortune 500 companies are also faced with restructuring and bankruptcy.

英语短文,请帮忙改下其中的错误!Why the college students’employment is difficult In my opinion,the difficulty of college students’employment is caused by the following four aspects:Firstly,the college students themselves:They are lack
似乎没有多少特别明显的错误,但我觉得看着就像在看一篇中文短文,我的意思不是说我英语水平高,而是感觉是中文式的英语.水平不低,但层次不高.用词,短语,句式都行,就是行文整体稍有欠缺.建议多阅读经典美文,范文,多与老师交流!