能不能麻烦你们帮忙修改下作文,We can see there is a computer has a horrible teeth is almostly eat the man's whole body ,and a another man is take a stick and saying that :'hold on!I gonna save you!'This picture is reaction a question,ind

能不能麻烦你们帮忙修改下作文,We can see there is a computer has a horrible teeth is almostly eat the man's whole body ,and a another man is take a stick and saying that :'hold on!I gonna save you!'This picture is reaction a question,ind
能不能麻烦你们帮忙修改下作文,
We can see there is a computer has a horrible teeth is almostly eat the man's whole body ,and a another man is take a stick and saying that :'hold on!I gonna save you!'
This picture is reaction a question,indulge in Internet games and that is the most serious promble for teenager.The Internet like a huge resources storeroom ,but if u can't use it in a right way ,it will gonna be the drug ,unhealthy and toxic.
As a student I should't spent such a lot of time to do this unmeaning thing ,I thing that is wasting our life ,why don't we do the other meaning thing Like talking with friends ,spending time with our family ,reading the book ,make a small trip .
I think that is more meaning than wasting the time on that kind nothingness thing .

能不能麻烦你们帮忙修改下作文,We can see there is a computer has a horrible teeth is almostly eat the man's whole body ,and a another man is take a stick and saying that :'hold on!I gonna save you!'This picture is reaction a question,ind
We can see that there is a computer which has a horrible teeth has almostly eaten the man's whole body,and an another man is taking a stick and says:" Hold on!I gonna save you!"
This picture reacts a question that indulging in Internet games is the most serious problem for teenagers.The Internet is like a huge storeroom full of resources,but if you can't use it in a right way,it gonna be the drug,unhealthy and toxic.
As a student,I shouldn't spend such a lot of time on doing this meaningless thing.I think it is a waste of life.Why don't we do other meaningful things?Such as talking with friends,spending time with our family,reading books and making a small trip?
I think that it is more meaningful than wasting time on that kind of meaningless things.

家里没有一个人----家里只有我一个人
没有一丁点的食物---一点食物也没发现
差点撞到了人---居然差点撞到人
仔细一看---定睛一看
递过来一个粽子,这是爷爷在端午的时候亲手包的
这篇作文吧。看到中间挺奇怪的，爷爷至于那么抠吗？包个粽子还舍不得，再说粽子一包一不止一个吧？还放那么多天不怕臭啊？吃个粽子还搞的挺悲伤，用语文的说法就是无病呻吟。别的也没法改了...

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家里没有一个人----家里只有我一个人
没有一丁点的食物---一点食物也没发现
差点撞到了人---居然差点撞到人
仔细一看---定睛一看
递过来一个粽子,这是爷爷在端午的时候亲手包的
这篇作文吧。看到中间挺奇怪的，爷爷至于那么抠吗？包个粽子还舍不得，再说粽子一包一不止一个吧？还放那么多天不怕臭啊？吃个粽子还搞的挺悲伤，用语文的说法就是无病呻吟。别的也没法改了，立意我觉得就不是太好。

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